Poem: I miss you so
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Like a single feather,
curled and floating upon a shallow pond,
once providing warmth to a robin’s breast.
This is how I miss you so.
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Like a golden duckling,
who strayed too far from his nest,
scared and shivering, alone in the storm.
This is how I miss you so.
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Like a drifting balloon,
slowly soaring into the evening sky,
sadly released from a crying child’s grip.
This is how I miss you so.
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Like a soldiers dog,
waiting patiently at the front fence,
no distraction moves him from his post.
This is how I miss you so.
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Like the tears welting in my eyes,
when I think of how I could be with you.
The lump in my throat makes it hard to swallow this loneliness.
This is how I miss you so.
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About this poem...
This is my first attempt at a non rhyming poem. I’ve tried to keep the prose structured and at the same time make the words and ‘story’ flow. I’ve tried to convey the message behind the poem with dramatic similes to, hopefully, portray the imagery effectively.
The inspiration for this poem stems from me being away from my wife for work reasons and quite a bit throughout our life together. When I am away this is how I feel, after we have finished our phone conversation, when the loneliness sinks in. There is probably nothing as boring and lonely as being away from her and being holed up in dreary hotel room, watching rubbish on TV alone.
This poem is for her, hope you like it lovey!
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Help with writing love poems…
Love poetry can be written about many different themes and ideas. This love poem is about being away from a partner. It describes the feelings and emotions of being separated. The poem uses similes of various real life situations to dramatically portray the writer’s feelings. The writer (me) hasn’t been specific about the separation therefore this poem can be used in quite a few situations. For example this poem could be as tragic as being about the loss of a partner. This love poem could be about the separation of partners on their wedding day from the time that they are getting ready to the time that they meet at the altar. In my case, as I have described, this poem was written because I am away from wife at times for work reasons.
So if you are writing love poetry you can be specific about the situation you are describing or you could choose to be less specific. Being less specific creates a love poem that could be used in a few situations and gives it a timeless quality. Although being specific could be a more personal approach. Your partner will still love you for writing your poem in either instance.
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Thanks Tennesee Fafard.
I miss the little candy harts all us elementaly kids use to eat on Valentines Day. I never liked school all that much. I don't think I disliked school because I disliked learning-I was just not in the right place at the right time. But, on those days when we were able to eat Valentines Candy-I really was a happy little girl. I remember how it felt when my teacher would tell me to put away my school work and get out my glue and crayons. On those days-that came only once a year-I was happy. The smell of glue in the air and the construction paper that would glue together to create the mail boxes that would hang up on the wall in the front of our class room-was the best smell in school. And, then on that day when all the Valentines Day cards would begin to come to school often accompanied with those lovely candy harts a stress that a little girl should not know would fade away for a while. I do miss candy harts.
Shealy Healy
I think you are a little off track with your comment and the meaning of this poem, but thank for the comment anyway Shealy Healy. Have you considered writing a hub on Heart Candy?
Sorry, you are right-I was inspired by your candy.
I only write rhyming poetry, so i can only sit back and admire your great contribution to non rhyming. Some poetry is too obscure for me to understand. Try the Nags Head eight, it's my 'tongue in cheek' attempt to cover this topic. You should keep writing, as many more readers will appreciate your well thought out efforts. Cheers again.
Thanks attemptedhumour i'll have to read your Nags Head eight hub. Thanks for the comment.
just how i feel, thank you.
You did an awesome job with this poem...made me feel you missing your special someone....just beautiful..I voted up and beautiful..debbie
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Tennesee Fafard 2 years ago
Love it